Review the following errors from your essays.
SOME errors in student papers: Essay 1, English 1302, Spring 2011
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· Artists should not be blamed for the realistic violence.
· Looking at media from comic books to news broadcast to video games is a broad area to explore.
· The latest and most talked about would be video game violence.
· Violence in the media is nothing new to Hollywood and America, however, over the recent years it has been steadily increasing.
· For example, video games such as “Mortal Combat” and the rapper Eminem.
· This world is centered on violence. It has been that way ever since the beginning of time.
· All that junk isn’t true at all, none of that portrays what really goes on in the world.
· If these games are going to be made available, they need to be better monitored and they also need to portray it as how people think it should be.
· Especially, now that we have such incredible ways of communicating, that many people blamed as the cause of violence in our society.
· More over, base on the idea of exposing our kids to a little bit of violence on the media not only expose them, but teach them in order for them to learn how to deal with violence, some time this can help them to face their fears just like in this case happened with Jones son.
· You see things differently than others, maybe you like things more creative or you find unusual things fascinating, and it’s why you’re considered different.
· This is the sure way how the media today incorporates the intellect of embracing children that really think it’s cool to join the Army after playing that shooter type game.
· Artists that are imposed of doing songs and urging kids today to hate society or to take down someone, isn’t exactly his or her fault.
· All of these devices are force feeding you the message that it wants to give you, whether it be something whimsical like happy pretty things or something sadistic like the butchering of a small child.
· Since all these forms of entertainment, it is clearly impossible to censor out every violent thing in each and one of these forms of media; which in that case, the media should not be censored.
· Violence in movies and television shows are more affective on younger generations teaching and showing them that it’s ok to be violent causing it to be easier for them to want to be violent as well.
· “I am going to argue that our fear of ‘youth violence’ isn’t well founded on reality,” (Jones 39) yet the fear kept me from wearing my favorite shirt around my friends.
· Sometimes its good for the news to show some things that are out there in the world so we can be prepared. However something’s are defiantly not needed by the media.
· As an American citizen we are given the feedom to speech and expression.
· I believe that the censorship of violence in the media had its pros and cons.
· “…our fear of “youth violence” isn’t well founded on reality” (39).
· In my personal opinion, it is entertainment or just to know what is going on in the world. It all depends on who watches it and how they take it.
· There are reasons why violent media should be censored, but there are also reasons why it should not be.
· You can hear music which refers to things such as; drugs, shooting people, and hitting women.
· John Leo has also expressed, “Head shots pay a bonus in many video games.” (47)
· Censorship of such a thing also kills creativity.
· The public can possibly use it to protect themselves from any possible future threats on their lives, where others may try to learn more about it to try it themselves.
· In today’s society there are many forms of media that are considered acceptable and unacceptable.
· Censorship can come in many shapes and degree.
· Media about violence generally is defined about covering concerning stories in society or in a community.
· Some violence helps children with their everyday life.
· That means that he is trying to explain how playing games is a bad thing.
· The influence media has on our youth.
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· Artists should not be blamed for the realistic violence.
· Looking at media from comic books to news broadcast to video games is a broad area to explore.
· The latest and most talked about would be video game violence.
· Violence in the media is nothing new to Hollywood and America, however, over the recent years it has been steadily increasing.
· For example, video games such as “Mortal Combat” and the rapper Eminem.
· This world is centered on violence. It has been that way ever since the beginning of time.
· All that junk isn’t true at all, none of that portrays what really goes on in the world.
· If these games are going to be made available, they need to be better monitored and they also need to portray it as how people think it should be.
· Especially, now that we have such incredible ways of communicating, that many people blamed as the cause of violence in our society.
· More over, base on the idea of exposing our kids to a little bit of violence on the media not only expose them, but teach them in order for them to learn how to deal with violence, some time this can help them to face their fears just like in this case happened with Jones son.
· You see things differently than others, maybe you like things more creative or you find unusual things fascinating, and it’s why you’re considered different.
· This is the sure way how the media today incorporates the intellect of embracing children that really think it’s cool to join the Army after playing that shooter type game.
· Artists that are imposed of doing songs and urging kids today to hate society or to take down someone, isn’t exactly his or her fault.
· All of these devices are force feeding you the message that it wants to give you, whether it be something whimsical like happy pretty things or something sadistic like the butchering of a small child.
· Since all these forms of entertainment, it is clearly impossible to censor out every violent thing in each and one of these forms of media; which in that case, the media should not be censored.
· Violence in movies and television shows are more affective on younger generations teaching and showing them that it’s ok to be violent causing it to be easier for them to want to be violent as well.
· “I am going to argue that our fear of ‘youth violence’ isn’t well founded on reality,” (Jones 39) yet the fear kept me from wearing my favorite shirt around my friends.
· Sometimes its good for the news to show some things that are out there in the world so we can be prepared. However something’s are defiantly not needed by the media.
· As an American citizen we are given the feedom to speech and expression.
· I believe that the censorship of violence in the media had its pros and cons.
· “…our fear of “youth violence” isn’t well founded on reality” (39).
· In my personal opinion, it is entertainment or just to know what is going on in the world. It all depends on who watches it and how they take it.
· There are reasons why violent media should be censored, but there are also reasons why it should not be.
· You can hear music which refers to things such as; drugs, shooting people, and hitting women.
· John Leo has also expressed, “Head shots pay a bonus in many video games.” (47)
· Censorship of such a thing also kills creativity.
· The public can possibly use it to protect themselves from any possible future threats on their lives, where others may try to learn more about it to try it themselves.
· In today’s society there are many forms of media that are considered acceptable and unacceptable.
· Censorship can come in many shapes and degree.
· Media about violence generally is defined about covering concerning stories in society or in a community.
· Some violence helps children with their everyday life.
· That means that he is trying to explain how playing games is a bad thing.
· The influence media has on our youth.